Shopping at a Department store

My family always go to a department store on a holiday, we can watch one of the newest movies in the movie theater and eat some delicious food in there. My dad always go to the clothing stores and my mom always go window-shopping, and we often go to the video arcades to play some games.

It is the most convenient way to shop because it has lots of stores in there such as bookstores, clothing stores, restaurants, video stores and many other stores. You can buy anything you want, so just don’t stay in your house and act like a coach potatoes.

It doesn’t cost you much to go to a department store, if you just take a window-shopping, my mom always do that. Shopping at the department store can give you a great joy.

Shopping at a Department store

     My family always goes to a department store during the holidays, and we often watch some of the newest movies in the movie theaters and eat delicious food there. My dad always goes to the clothing stores and my mom always goes window shopping. My brother, sister and I will go to the video arcades to play some games.

    The shopping malls offer the most convenient way to shop because it has lots of stores in there, such as bookstores, clothing stores, restaurants, video stores and many others. You can buy anything you want and have a good time, so just don’t stay in your house and act like a coach potato.

     It doesn’t cost you much to go to a department store, If you just window shop. My mom always does that. Shopping at the department stores can provide you with many hours of fun.

Shopping at a Department store

     My family always goes (Grammar problem here : Family goes…because family is a singular non) to a department store on a (Use “during”. “During” means “at the time of…”) during the holidays,(Must add an “s” here, because you are talking about more than one holiday) and we can (“Often” is better than “Can” because … of course you can do it, but often tells the reader more useful information about the frequency) often watch one some (Why “one” because it should be more than one movie you have watched.) of the newest movies in the movie theaters (Again, you need an “s” here because you must have surely visited more than one theater) and eat some (No need for “some” because you do not really need to tell how much food you have eaten) delicious food in there. My dad always goes to the clothing stores and my mom always goes window shopping., and we often My brother, sister and I will (Tell the reader who the “We” you are referring to) go to the video arcades to play some games.

     It is The shopping malls offer (“Offer” means “provide”) the most convenient way to shop because it has lots of stores in there, such as bookstores, clothing stores, restaurants, video stores and many others.(Add an “s” here because you are talking about more stores than just one to add to your list)  stores. You can buy anything you want and have a good time (“Have a good time” tells the reader something more about what you can expect, other than shopping) , so just don’t stay in your house and act like a coach potatoes. (Singular noun here)

     It doesn’t cost you much to go to a department store., If you just take a window shop.(You either “window shop” or “go window shopping”, but to “take a window shop” is wrong and unheard of) ping, My mom always do that. Shopping at the department stores can give (“Provide” means “offer’ or “give you”) provide you with many hours of fun. you a great joy. (“Great joy” is an exaggeration. “Many hours of fun” best describes how you feel when you are shopping. You get “great joy” when you score 100 for all your tests, or when you received many birthday presents on your birthday.