Parks

The is a place give you to relax. That place you can see a lot grassplot and some of the park will have the fountain, it is so beautiful.

The park will have a lot people in there, because the park is a good place to go and the park’s scenery is very beautiful. You can see there will have a lot old people in the park that because the park have good air, the old people like the good air and need it so it will have a lot old people in the park. However, the park not only old people but also young people in the park, there is a very good place to go there to relax and you can have a picnic in there and you will have a good time.

I like to go to the park, because the park will make feel so comfortable and so relax, in the park I can have fun in there. I very like to go to the park.

Parks

A park is a place where you can relax. You can see a lot of greeneries and some of the parks even have fountains. They are so beautiful.

Parks are usually crowded because they are good places to go to, and the park’s sceneries are very beautiful. You can see a lot of old people in parks because they love the park’s fresh air. Old people like fresh air and that is why you can see a lot of them in the parks. However, parks are not only for old people, but young people as well. It is a very good place to go to if you want to relax, and you can also have a picnic there. You will surely have a good time.

I like to go to the parks, because it makes me feel so comfortable and so relaxed. I can have fun there. I like to go to the park very much.

Parks

      The A park (Not “the” because you are talking about parks in general, and NOT a specific park in mind)  is a place give where (I know in Chinese you use “give” here, but in English, it is “where”) you to can relax. That place You can see a lot grassplot of greeneries (“Greeneries” are plants, tress, grass and so on…) and some of the parks even (“even” means “also” here) will have the fountains. , it is (“They” and not “It” because you are talking about parks in the plural) They are so beautiful.

      The Parks are usually crowded (“Crowded” meaning having a lot of people) will have a lot people in there, because the park is a (You do not have to keep repeating “The park” again and again. Use “They” as a replacement) they are good places to go to, and the park’s sceneries (Plural form, because we are talking about more than one park)  is are very beautiful. You can see there will have a lot of old people in the parks that because they love the park’s fresh (“Fresh” means new and not polluted)  have good air. , the Old people like the good fresh air and need it so it will have that is why you can see a lot old people of them in the parks. However, the parks are not only for old people, but also young people as well. (“As well” means “also”)  in the park , there It is a very good place to go to if you want (Emphasize on the fact that you “want to”…)  there to relax, and you can also have a picnic in there. and You will surely (“Surely” meaning “definitely”) have a good time.

      I like to go to the parks, because the park will (You are repeating the word “park” again here. Use “It” here) it makes me feel so comfortable and so relaxed. (Must be in past tense “relaxed”) , in the park I can have fun in there. I very like to go to the park very much..  (I think you have made this mistake before… “I very like…”. You must remember to think in English when you are writing English)